The Murder Mystery

by mr.xcentrix

Tags: Puzzle, Serious

Description

Meet Mike, a twenty-seven year old. He was a happily married husband, with a great job, until one day, his wife is discovered dead, nobody knows how. Mike must now go through different possbilites with the situation, any way he can. It could go from one extreme to the next, easy or hard as it is, to find out the truth about the death to his wife, Karen

This was spell checked, right before the release... It is my first story. So I'm just adjusting to make stories. Everyone who sees this, please read, and enjoy!

Stats

(on a scale of 1 to 8)

Maturity Level: 4 - need to be accompanied by an adult
Story Difficulty: 3 - trek through the forest
Play Length: 6 - It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®
Player Rating: 5 - not the best, certainly not the worst (based on 20 ratings)
My Rating: you have not yet rated this game
Played 187 times and finished 32 times since 8/23/2010

Comments

A very very very sad ending!

-- DarkentityOni (Score of 0)
12/22/2011 10:58:41 PM:

I liked this story and it was a good effort. I'd tend to agree with the other comments regarding plot holes and the like. One thing I'm curious about, and I don't mean this as an insult, but is English your first language? I noticed that some of the grammatical errors are common errors made by ESL students; the same went for some of the phrases. Anyway, hopefully you didn't just take that as a huge insult because I thought it was creative and a great effort, looking forward to more.

-- madglee (Score of 0)
11/9/2010 9:26:48 PM:

I thought the two identical endings were too grim to be enjoyable. Seems inconsistent with the tone of the story. In some cases I wished for shorter pages and more choices, though the latter would add to complexity. I suggest being consistent in using caps in choices and page titles. I agree with 3J on the plot holes. Storyboard your effort and stand back from the story to see how the flow can happen. And read it from the perspective of someone totally new to the story.

-- casmith (Score of 0)
11/9/2010 12:03:03 PM:

I like the flow and the pacing in this story, as well as the choices. I'm sympathetic to Mike, the main character. But the story leaves me with more questions than answers. What happened in Karen's childhood? What exactly is wrong with her brothers? You tell us they have "issues," but I'm not getting a visual. Take us into a scene instead of just telling us what happens. And it might be good to get someone to edit as opposed to just relying on spell check, which misses a lot of grammatical errors. Great first game, though. Makes me want to go back and try the other threads.

-- lisaves (Score of 0)
9/23/2010 3:00:44 PM:

the flow was interupted with too many inconsistencies. i struggled to stay with the story. however, on the bright side, this was one of the stronger new stories.

-- Fleshnblood_78 (Score of 0)
9/21/2010 12:35:30 AM:

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